TheFallenKnight wrote:Most of the ones on Fanfiction.net are just random gibberish with little to no effort put into them. Or just stories adding an unwanted Male character in. (The Authors themselves technically) The only good ones I read are on the M Rated Section of it. Mostly about NeptunexNoire.
I take offense to that statement. Also, is your next chapter ready yet?
Anyway, I have MY fanfiction:Hyperdimension Neptunia is Real!Summary:
One fateful night, due to an exploding PS3, Neptune herself falls from the sky and through a roof and a second-level floor in front of a certain teenager (read: me). At her request, he goes with her to Gamindustri and now he must 'assist' his new friends in their epic quest to find and retrieve the Key Fragments. Preferably without dying.Some reviews (kept anonymous):
Loved that fight. It was done very nicely. You've written a brilliant OC as well. Many people (myself included) would say that a male character would mess the atmosphere up in Neptunia (among other things) but you've managed to pull it off very nicely.
As far as things done wrong, I didn't see anything that stood out in particular.
Okay, first off, this is a really good fic, and the self-insert and character interactions are great and enjoyable. And trust me, there are worst self-insert fics out there.
Although I like the game for the characters I have to admit the gameplay is right and under crap. (Which the sequel improves by, well, a lot) Heck, I don't mind the goddess at all, and think they are good characters...well, I really don't like Nepgear in mk2 for some reason. (It might have to do with the Ruling ending or the fact that her HDD form is rather lame)
Either way, good luck in uni and keep on writing at your own pace!
... I laughed so damn hard, my throat got sore!
Your writing is awesome, my friend! Keep writing, I'm loving this already.