Connections (original fic which uses P3's chars)

[vampko]

Read three more chapters. Don't like much what you're doing to some characters, but that's really personal preference. I'm positive this is going to end very badly for everyone, but my naive self hopes that it won't.

You still have quite a few grammar issues. Though, strangely, the powerpoint flowed with nearly perfect grammar and didn't really have any typos.

[darkclaymore]

You still have quite a few grammar issues

. Though, strangely, the powerpoint flowed with nearly perfect grammar and didn't really have any typos.

It's because it was really made in Power Point

Don't like much what you're doing to some characters

It seems others don't really like positive people going insane...
Guess I'm the only one...

[vampko]

You still have quite a few grammar issues

. Though, strangely, the powerpoint flowed with nearly perfect grammar and didn't really have any typos.

It's because it was really made in Power Point

Don't like much what you're doing to some characters

It seems others don't really like positive people going insane...
Guess I'm the only one...

You're probably not the only one. But, you've unfortunately got me as one of the few who is willing to read through it.

People who like dark, gritty stories, are sure to enjoy this. It gets supernatural, but it doesn't take a silly path with it at all.

I'm just not the right audience. But, I feel compelled to finish it, because I already started it, and it's only right.

Your facepalm confuses me. Every subsequent chapter I write, tends to be better than the last one. Is it strange/unfair to expect that from others?

[darkclaymore]

Your facepalm confuses me. Every subsequent chapter I write, tends to be better than the last one. Is it strange/unfair to expect that from others?

No. It's facepalm about the fact that nothing really improved in latter chapters
Not the plot, nor the mistakes.
Well it doesn't exactly HAVE a plot until some point anyway

[Nazou]

Don't like much what you're doing to some characters

It seems others don't really like positive people going insane...
Guess I'm the only one...

I like happy characters geting screwed, specailly rigth after a moment of extreme joy, thus leading them to the verge of despair.


Also one thing I'm curious about on your story(sorry if the answer is there and I failed to notice).

Spoiler:

Who was the soul eater? Edward or his love?

[darkclaymore]

I like happy characters geting screwed, specailly rigth after a moment of extreme joy, thus leading them to the verge of despair.

Yeah. It is always great

Also one thing I'm curious about on your story(sorry if the answer is there and I failed to notice).

Spoiler:

Who was the soul eater? Edward or his love?

Spoiler:

his lover

[darkclaymore]

BTW, Nazou. I was wondering.
Did you read the whole thing or just the last few chapters?
Because in order to know this much about the story you must to do at least one of those.

[Nazou]

I read it all

[darkclaymore]

I read it all

What!?
You kidding!?

You should have mentioned this earlier!
It's a memorable event!

Two people have finished reading it so far
*I'm not counted of course

[Nazou]

[darkclaymore]

So what do you think of this story in general?

[Nazou]

So what do you think of this story in general?

Well let's see...
It's a nice story overall. The plot was interesting. the cast was well chosen. the pacing was good.

Spoiler:

At first I didn't liked that all those stories took part in diferent times but I grew to enjoy this later as well

Sorry, I don't really know how to make a review but if an "It was a pleasant reading" is enough you may have it.

[darkclaymore]

So what do you think of this story in general?

Well let's see...
It's a nice story overall. The plot was interesting. the cast was well chosen. the pacing was good.

Spoiler:

At first I didn't liked that all those stories took part in diferent times but I grew to enjoy this later as well

Sorry, I don't really know how to make a review but if an "It was a pleasant reading" is enough you may have it.

Well, I'm happy as long as there are good things to say about it
Makes me feel like it was worth sitting so many hours on every chapter

Spoiler:

I'm glad you ended up liking the "different times" events. I personally think it wouldn't have been the same without them

But man. I think it's the first and last time I'm going with this writing style. I love writing simple dialogs much more And to read them more too I guess
Hence I love my TWEWY comic more than this one. Even my friend agrees with me on this and we rarely agree on liking/disliking series. Maybe you could try it out sometime too . I know it starts out pretty much idiotically because I intended to make pure comedy. But soon afterwards I have changed my mind and did some more... "decent" stuff there.

[vampko]

It was pretty interesting, but I felt that you left off too much resolution for the characters that weren't the three or four most focused characters.

I did rather like the ending, but it felt too rushed, or reveally. Like, the final chapter was just a big exposition revealing everything, but there really wasn't much to go off of to build up to the reveal. If there were more hints/clues throughout it, it would have been more better, but it felt really forced the way it was done.

It was an enjoyable read, and an interesting take on things though

[Nazou]

But man. I think it's the first and last time I'm going with this writing style. I love writing simple dialogs much more And to read them more too I guess
Hence I love my TWEWY comic more than this one. Even my friend agrees with me on this and we rarely agree on liking/disliking series. Maybe you could try it out sometime too . I know it starts out pretty much idiotically because I intended to make pure comedy. But soon afterwards I have changed my mind and did some more... "decent" stuff there.

I will not read it since I have never played TWEWY